Your very welcome! But I do agree,it needs allot more work.
Ide love to go over it again, I just didnt want to be changing phrase's myself and later find out you didnt want me to D: (Just playing it safe haha!)
We will work on it like this, instead of me swamping you with the whole story after the edits, Ill send you say five pages after their fully editted by me.
Then you can proof read it and accept or reject it
As for the words I dont know, I can try to replace them with words I think will fit, if im still stuck Ill just note you with the ones I have no clue to about.
I hope that sounds alright for you
, have a great day!